by the time you came,
i had finished my white
chocolate iced coffee.
i had not seen you in a very long
time.
you had not been a tea-drinker
at that time,
and from the way you only let
your tea steep a minute,
i suspected you were still new
to it.
you held the tea bag a second
against the rim of your styrofoam
as i’m sure you had seen done,
then set the tea bag on the
table.
you did not even put a pad of
napkins under it.
you just set it there on the
table
where lukewarn raspberry water
collected in a puddle around it.
when the conversation lulled,
i took it from your side of the
table and dropped it into my cup,
which was empty except for the
half-melted ice,
the dregs of my sugar-coffee,
and a straw.
then i added the brown paper
napkin i’d used
to wipe up the mess you’d made
and put the lid back on top.
you said, “you just did all
that,” as though you were surprised.
and then we talked.
you’d been fliting with girls
again
and i had forgotten what i
believed in (again),
and when you finished your tea,
you folded your cup a couple
times in half
and added it to the trash in my
glass.
we sat there for a few hours
even after we were done,
ripping up napkins as neatly as
we could
and tossing the scraps into the
cup.
at one point, you picked the cup
up.
the ice had melted
and the napkins had drawn up the
dirt water
like a wick.
you said, “this is gross.”
i said, “maybe, but it’s kind of
pretty.”
you said, “i’ve made art,”
and i reminded you that i had
helped,
and you said, “we’ve made art.”
this one may well go in the pile of shame. it was the first day. but it's like, half a page of prose with line breaks in it, which i almost never approve of. images is what saves that style of writing, and i don't think these make the cut.
on the other hand, when i had coffee with non-responsive-friend, i actually did put his tea bag into my cup-- which is genuinely not freudian, i sweartogod-- and wipe up the mess he'd made. and he actually did add his cup, and we actually did watch the napkins in the cup soak up the dirty melted ice and compete to tear perfect squares out of other napkins.
i like that basic skeleton as an expression of how friendships work. but i don't think the stab at poetry above cuts it. in revision i would need to find a way to build the whole image of the frankensteiney dealio, and i would need to pare out unnecessary detail.
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